Snow Angels - Lonelygirllover

Hey guys, just messing around with some creative writing and wrote a short exract of a possible scene from snow angels, the bree an jonass video. please comment on what you think, whether it's any good or where I could improve? I kow it's not great but...yeah haha. Thankyou, Love you all.x

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She laughed, eyes twinkling, as she threw back her head and giggled guiltily at my discomfort.
Impatiently, I shook the snow off my face and cringed as the ice cold slush slid down my neck. Goosebumps raised alone my spine, protesting at this new onslaught of abuse. My senses awakened as the ice touched me, unaccustomed to be functioning at three in the morning.

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